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FTinPRC - 2017-09-07

Some lovely academic Chinglish from a Chinese professor of English:

"Patriarchy" is a cultural and also a socio-historical phenomenon in nature
associated with certain mental attitudes on the part of men and women as well.

Aren't all "cultural phenomena" socio-historic in nature? Aren't all "mental attitudes" shared by some men and some women. Isn't everything shared identified "as well"?

I am not
so sure as to whether

Why would anyone finish reading a sentence that begins this way?

We don't need any feminism of the kind that you suggest but equal rights for men and women

"don't... but" Avoid double negatives.

equal rights for men and women
guaranteed by the constitution and their implementation in daily life.

"their" = feminism's? men's? women's? constitution's? Avoid pronouns; repeat your subject.

Historically, feminists are mere talkers - with a few of notable exceptions.

"Historically" is a throw away conjunction on a par with "Needless to say". "Notable exceptions" must be noted.

And in general,
they do not tend to change the world to the better.

For the better. Avoid prepositions.

Kudos.

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Re: Re We have some broflakes on this board -- och -- 2017-09-05
Re: Re We have some broflakes on this board -- Stranger -- 2017-09-05
Re: Re We have some broflakes on this board -- FTinPRC -- 2017-09-07
Re: Re We have some broflakes on this board -- caring -- 2017-09-08
Re: Re We have some broflakes on this board -- Great Online Teacher -- 2017-09-08
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